Persuasion on the way (Blog #10)

Building a solid foundation for an argument on my topic was a little difficult, so I've decided that i am going to be writing a more persuasive paper. I will be persuading my audience towards the idea of EDM culture not just being a huge Drug festival and that it does bring together millions of people, supports multitudes of charities and altogether deserves more respect than the media has been casting on it. to ensure that my voice is heard clearly i will address the fact that drug users do still exist and are a very big problem in the EDM community. Different people argue in many ways about how the EDM culture is nowadays. Activists will say that it is a wonderful experience to go to a festival or that the business going on behind the music is booming, whereas those with views would bring up the death in 2011 as one of my sources, Derek Staples did in "Why MDMA is destroying EDM". Some possible people in my audience that don't include anybody in our class would be concert goers and EDM fans without a doubt, but i would hope that it could also reach out to bigger names like the people who run events such as Insomniac productions or those in charge of the venues that concerts get played at. My personal position on this is that The dangers brought to the EDM scene by rampant drug users are getting attention, but in the worst way possible. i believe that while it is a problem that needs to be fixed, it is the only problem being shown on the front page and that page may as well be titled "Don't Go to an EDM Show". it's all so harsh on the issue that the media would drown out the position of the other concert goers that must deal with it directly. I recently went to a concert, so some of my personal experience from that will affect my paper through my examples. that concert would cover this issue very well i assume, mostly because the concert was HDYFEST on April 20th. in other words it was a 4/20 show at red rocks in colorado. I've got plenty of examples to throw into this paper. I hope to present this paper to my readers as an invitation to anybody who claims to have a viewpoint on this issue but has never experienced it first hand. I want my readers to develop a view that is real, not one that they learned through the grapevine.

Cited

"The Rise of EDM." Music Business Journal Berklee College of Music RSS. N.p., n.d. Web. 13 Apr. 2016.

"Why MDMA Is Destroying EDM." Consequence of Sound. N.p., 04 Sept. 2013. Web. 13 Apr. 2016.

Light-bulb' (synthesis reflection)

The most important thing i learned while writing this synthesis paper was how to mull over two differing viewpoints and put out my own polished idea using the information I've learned. I learned how to analyze an author for their ethos a lot more efficiently from the research portion of the paper. I now know that i can very easily find another writers three points of persuasion very easily in their writing. If I could have done something differently for this assignment i would put more time into a rough draft of my essay.My "light-bulb moment" was when i had found my second source of choice and found a legitimate argument to the strong basis i had already found and had my whole idea.

Blog #7 Summary of 2 articles

http://www.thembj.org/2012/10/the-rise-of-edm/
Text 1:

this text is a very professional seeming business journal written by Danny Feinstein and Colin Ramsay, two college students at the Berklee college of music. this text talks about how EDM has risen from the sidelines of music genres and taken such a huge jump in the rankings. Showing how EDM has evolved and Explaining how this new age of technology is helping to slingshot it's popularity are some of the other key points. The largest chunk of information this text seems to focus on is the Business of EDM. Their final topic carries out three full paragraphs of information while other topics had one or two. After reading through this text i have concluded that the authors of this article did not appear to be biased in any way, besides not showing any of the negative data that has been collected over the years regarding drug use and other such taboos. this text did not address those issues which could have been a conscious choice if they are trying to add more hype to EDM.

Text 2:

http://consequenceofsound.net/2013/09/why-mdma-is-destroying-edm/

This texts name seems very promising in terms of conflict. As i read through this text i was getting the fix on the topic of drug use in EDM culture. Derek Staples, The author of this text, explains how he goes to multiple festivals and shows learning all about the culture that goes on there. It becomes increasingly obvious that Staples believes the new age of EDM is led by young adults hooked on drugs.  these two texts will work very well for me in that they have quite opposing views on the new uprise of EDM